Task: to write explanation writing
This week i have revisited, consolidated, re-learnt, and have confirmed,the structure of an explanation writing.
Wouldn’t it be more beneficial? , if St Pius X could change the times for morning teas and lunchtimes. The reason behind this is that it always feel like they are short ,but if we get our learning done in the morning, from 9:00 to 1:00 pm, we can have a longer break from 1:00 to 2:00 pm which is a whole hour of playing.
Changing the time, will help the teachers with getting everything done,especially with our learning, also it will give us time to finish off things that we haven't finished and completed.This will be a good idea, because it will give us more time to do our work, instead of rushing it and getting it uncompleted.
In the future i would like to see my changes that i have made in St Pius X.
Hello Kaliamata,
ReplyDeleteWell done on completing your writing, I can see your process in writing reading your writing is wonderful and let be honest i agree with you wil chaining the time for morning tea and lunch, you have a good reason on why we should change the time. My feed back to you is two not use that much "and" in your story, But besides that keep everything up and keep going.
Hi Kaliamata,
ReplyDeleteI think that your idea of having a 1hour lunch break is really exciting because we WILL have more time to play. But I also think that doing our work from 9 o'clock til 1pm is a very long time to do learning. Maybe you could think some more about the timing and then add some more information into your piece of writing.
Mikaela
Hi Kaliamata,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you have explained what you want to change in your school. I think that next time you should re-read your writing and make sure you have capital in the right places.
Great Job
Mei
Hi Kaaliamata,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you have explained what you want to change in your school.Maybe when your finish from school they would like to do your change.
Keep it up!!!